Friday Snippets – Short Story

FS02I decided to post a snippet from a short story I wrote last year called ‘On the Corner of Central Avenue.’

Hope you enjoy!

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Bill scanned the stretch of greenery for an available seat. His eyes fell upon his usual shaded bench but perched on one corner was an old man with a stick. Stubble spread across his face like a disease. He wore a ragged jacket and muddied trainers with gaping holes. Great. The man was homeless and sat on the only available bench. Bill thought about heading back to the office but the thought of being confined in that stuffy room, having to listen to Sue talk about her cat, or listen to Michael moan about every significant person in his life, made him dismiss the idea. Then he considered sitting on the grass but he did not want to risk wrinkling his perfect trousers and he imagined the look on Margaretโ€™s face if, knowing him, he ended up sitting in something unsavoury. So the bench it was.

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Thanks for reading! Comments are always welcome ๐Ÿ™‚

FS01

6 thoughts on “Friday Snippets – Short Story

  • February 15, 2013 at 12:28 pm
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    Sounds like Bill is a very particular man! I love the line, “Stubble spread across his face like a disease.” It not only describes the homeless man, but gives us clues about Bill’s character, too.

    Maybe in the second sentence change “eyes” for “gaze”, or some such word, just so we don’t imagine Bill’s eyes falling out of his head! I remember that was one of Holly’s remarks once and she drilled it into my head ๐Ÿ™‚

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  • February 16, 2013 at 12:04 am
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    I’d be disappointed as well, if my favorite spot was taken. I found Bill a well-rounded character. I like him ๐Ÿ™‚

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